Character is at school, walking around in a suit with a silly gait, trying to attract attention but not getting the kind he’s looking for. He’s unaware of this. | Meet [generic name that makes you immediately think “who”], a kid who dresses in old fashion a lot and tries to act a gentlemen, for as of yet unknown reasons. |
Scenes showing him with his friends for the first time, who tell him how stupid he looked (in a joking way, but also being honest). He responds with stubbornness. | Alright that’s not specific, but we get the impression that he really doesn't know how he looks to others. We don’t know exactly why still. Implies he’s been at this for a while. |
He’s in class, he talks in a very refined accent but he doesn't look like he’s pulling it off, he gets snickers from those around him. | Closer look at what he tries to do at school, still not a very good idea of why he does this other than to supposedly look cool (without succeeding) |
Cut to him at home, his room has a lot of 50’s paraphernalia and propaganda, wallpapers. Clothing in closet is mostly older clothing. Newer clothing is tucked in the back. | We now where he is influenced to do what he does. He is going through a phase where he is obsessed with the old days of dressing in suits every day, and where everyone looks and acts perfectly. |
Back to school. Lunch time. He looks around at the lunch area, looks disgusted/non interested. Focus on others clothing. | We learn where his interests are directed. He treats other peoples’ dressing with disdain or at least disinterest, but we are still unsure. |
Another scene of him with his friends. He’s discussing his dislike of other’s clothing, how unattractive it is, how rude people are, etc. His friends tell him to cool down, that’s the way it is, people will move on to another way of acting, he can’t start something. | Man this is long. This brings out the goal and obstacle. His goal is to get people to dress like him, act like him. He’s trying to impose his views on others. Obstacle: his own awkwardness and the fact that it takes a lot of effort to get something new in style. Not the way he’s doing it. |
He reflects on his actions in a corridor, realizes what he’s been doing. Guy comes by and emphasizes this (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IRsPheErBj8) EPIPHANY. SADNESS. | This is discovery. He finds out the truth of just how unsuccessful he’s been. He hasn't abandoned his goal but he sure as hell is questioning it. We don’t know how he will succeed, if at all. The climax. |
Then, suddenly, interesting individuals! He comes upon others of his kind, who have had similar experiences. Mainly though, they want help organizing. One of them suggests an idea. | I know, it sounds a bit like a deus ex machina. But this is the solution, the final push. And it shows a slow going up from the pit he was in before. But here’s another unknown, we don’t know what they have in mind. |
Then we have the group of suit aficionados going up to a teacher in charge of clubs. It’s unexpected. It’s revolutionary. It is...THE GENTLEMEN’S CLUB. | Oh my god I’m sorry I had to do this. It leaves a lot of ambiguity as to what will happen but we know the main character is satisfied with what he has accomplished. FIN. |
Monday, October 1, 2012
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Im gonna start out by saying you have alot of great ideas. I especially like the closet gag, very funny. I feel the same about this era, ruffians who throw trash on the floor with no regard for others, letting the seagulls trash our campus. This could be conformed into a really good social commentary, on topics I would really like to address. I would say however that organization of these gags into a more complete narrative would be beneficial. It feels alike a comic strip, culmination of scenes being the comic frames with a quick ending shebang. I would also put more characterization of the boy in there, rather than more than a few "nerd!" comments, such as more reasons he is a nerd, rather than just his clothing alone; i feel this would add stronger motivation for the plot.
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